ObWi goes Slamming…

In comments here Reader sidereal said:

Obsidian Wings poetry slam impending.

After reading up on the subject… sure, why not?

Rules:

1) Do your own work;
2) Keep it… hmm, thirty lines or so maximum;
3) If you’re looking for a topic, Spring is almost here.

I’ll create an actual Poetry Slam entry page that’ll autoload at 8 PM on Tuesday. Under the gun, sure, but what the heck. Stretch you folks a bit.

11 thoughts on “ObWi goes Slamming…”

  1. up too late, should be working, but dammit, here goes…
    while smiling
    My fingers creep across the unconquered table
    trying to eat the last inch, the last centimeter, then to touch
    easiest thing in the world and hardest, too
    I know you so well, I should be effortlessly able
    to cross this distance, an effort not much
    to speak of, I know, or, at least, I knew
    before I tried, while smiling, to reach you.

  2. Anarchy Now
    And so the law was passed,
    That on the count of “three,”
    The world would revert
    To total Anarchy.
    There were, of course,
    Balloons and cheers galore.
    But the official counter
    Sort of jumped the gun
    And, well, after having
    Calmly shouted “ONE!”
    He mumbled “two” and
    Quickly lept to “FOUR!”

  3. I think this is a line or two over 30, but what the heck. I deleted people’s names.
    Autobiography through Geography
    More than anything else, she writes of the places she has known.
    She lists the names of cities and streets, of neighborhoods
    and baseball stadiums and national parks. She describes
    the steel cables of the bridges, or the rain on asphalt, or the
    late afternoon light, or the fog over fir forests and low cliffs.
    She could claim this came from the same impulse that led her
    six-year-old self to memorize, for fun, all fifty states’ capitals,
    but she knows the real reason is that it is easier to speak of
    houses and brownstones and high-rises than the people in them;
    safer and less embarrassing to write about the man playing
    soft hits of the seventies on Andean pipes in Downtown Crossing
    than the friends walking beside her. She can describe
    a part of Brooklyn or of Somerville without resorting
    to hopeless cliché, or so she would like to believe, but
    how does one describe true love or true friendship,
    without using phrases like “true love” or “true friendship”?
    If she ever learns that, she will become a real writer.
    As it is she will have to keep saying “the footpath over
    the Brooklyn Bridge” or “the Jackie Robinson Parkway”
    when she means J—— L——-; “the Mister Softee truck
    in Union Square” when she means R—- L—-;
    “the Alewife bound track at Downtown Crossing” when she means S—- W—-;
    “the Cambridgeport Saloon” when she means J—’s friends from school.
    She will say “North Lake Campgrounds” when
    she means her father; and “the Hudson Guild book fair”
    when she means her mother; “the dogwood tree in Uniondale”
    when she means her grandmother; “the pool in Kent” or “the
    Snowy Express” when she means V—-, E—- and P——.

  4. and the footsteps of fleeting interests
    wear grooves like fingerprints
    into her mind, three weeks at a time;
    (the other trace a menagerie of bookbindings lent
    old against the wall)
    and by their pattern she leaves tiny traces
    on mountains bit by titans
    and by their map she is led to heavy elms
    in the bark of which she drafts a moratorium
    on poems with birds
    or about snow

  5. Is haiku acceptable?
    *ahem*
    Was that the sound
    Of an unbalanced centrifuge?
    More holes in the wall.

  6. Thanks for the impetus, Moe.
    Tied To Time
    March, and spring is working its way
    up the north side of the valley. At the top
    of the street the cherry tree has chosen to hope
    that the sun has broken winter’s back.
    Its blossoms bud coral and ripen
    white over the hill’s crest and should
    dominate the sky and the thriving city below,
    but in front of it someone has placed a sign:
    No parking Mondays 8-10 AM,
    mostly red on white but white on red for the NO.
    At its base the cherry petals have started to snow.

  7. Lovely poem, Katherine. I’d sacrifice a few of the repetitions at the end myself, but you can probably get it published as is.

  8. You may be right about the repetitions. I have a weakness for lists, and of course try explaining that to the friends and relatives you deleted that it’s aesthetic, not personal…
    I also should change the first appearance of “Downtown Crossing” to “Winter Street”.

  9. Katherine, I find that asking the question “can the poem survive without this line or word (esp. adjs and advs)” is useful. If necessary, write a version for the public (perhaps with the names blank, as you’ve done), one for those who know. Most of my attributions are to A or b etc.
    Long as I’m being editorial, “fog over fir forests and low cliffs” might be say “fog over the pines and bluffs” – a bit more specific, fewer adjs, fewer bunched “f”s, arguably better rhythm.
    And I’d consider changing the title to Biography or switch to first person.
    Let me know if you can fix my title above.

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